Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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These days,
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is an ever increasing problem in contemporary schools.
Discipline
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is extremely important so that children are well behaved, have self control and not become a failure in society. Some people think that
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should be the responsibility of teachers, whilst others think that
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is the role of parents. It is the aim of
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essay to present the roles of both parents and teachers and
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share my opinion about the argument above.
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of all, I think
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of the main duties of parents is to not spoil and pamper their child. Once a child is pampered, it is extremely hard to sculpt the child into a person with
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.
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, parents need to be strict and
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authority but
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authority, but
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their children some respect so that they are not intimidated by their parents. Parents should
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become a role model and
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some
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to their children
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by obeying traffic rules and so on.
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, I think parents should educate their kids to be
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disciplined
by giving them chores and making sure they do them.
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, the roles of teachers. Teachers should not only educate students
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academically, but
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educate them about
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which is not emphasised in the curriculum. Teachers should
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them the consequences of not being
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disciplined
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inspire them to become a better person by telling them real-life success stories. Teachers should
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punish students for their wrong doings
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as not doing their homework, not obeying school rules and
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monitor students behaviours on a daily basis.  If
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of the students does not
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any signs of
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, it is mandatory to give the student
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on
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counselling so that that student can be advised.  To sum it all up, parents cannot control their kids in school whilst teachers cannot educate students at home. In my opinion, both sides are equally important in instilling the virtue which is
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discipline
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disciplined
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children. Lack of proper
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parenting
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brings too
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drawbacks to not just them but the society. I hope that both sides join forces and not argue who has the larger responsibility to raise children that are disciplined

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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