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Certain individual are of the opinion that it is the duty of nations to rendered assistance to each other when in need, however, other disagreed and think the needy never access the assistant in terms of finance.

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When some Countries are experiencing hardship, it is necessary for other nations
to give
Suggestion
give
 a helping hand.
This
support
 could be in
form
Suggestion
the form
 of money, food items and other essential materials.
Hence
this
 kind of gesture could go a long way to relieve the individuals in
such
 nations.
For instance
, when Mali country was facing financial crisis and lacking crucial basic materials, countries like
United State
Suggestion
United States
the United State
 of
American
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America
 and Nigeria was able to reach out to them. The poorer countries ought to be relieved if due
support
 is given to them and properly utilised.
On the other hand
, many are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 disturbed that the needy nations despite the financial assistance received from various countries, they failed to offer financial
support
 to the poor.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of people globally have lost the conscience of sanity, especially the leaders in position. There by making
citizens
Suggestion
the citizens
 to be predisposed and exposed to suffering in their own countries. A recent article published by a journal stated that most countries still
remains
Suggestion
remain
 in their present situation in respectively of the huge
support
 given by the richer countries. In conclusion, rendering financial services to the poorer nations is a crucial development.
However
, the money offered to the needy countries should be appropriately utilised.
Thus
 creating an enabling environment for every
citizens
Suggestion
citizen
 to strive.
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