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In many places,new homes are needed but the only space availablefor building them is in the country side.Some people believed it is more important to protect the country side and not build new homes

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New
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodations
 are essential in numerous areas and the only accessible part for the erection of these structures are the rural portion of the country.It has been argued by a set of individuals that
safe-guarding
make safe
safeguarding
 the countryside is paramount and not for accommodation purposes which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly disagree with.
To begin
, city life may have in it all of the seemingly interesting way of
life but
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life, but
 living in serene regions of the country has
healthy
Suggestion
health
 benefits.
For example
, natural organic foods are highly attainable (because they grow well in
this
 landscape).So, when new homes are built in
this
 space
,
Accept space
,
individuals occupying them have sound health with reduced or no hospital visits which will in turn add to the well-being statistics of the nation
In addition
,
Accept space
,
clean
air which
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air, which
 is one of the favourable
factor
Suggestion
factors
 of residing in
this
 zone.Due to virtual absence or less factories and cars
,
Accept space
,
there is reduced production of potentially toxic fumes which are
also
 harmful to the body.
Therefore
,allowing people to construct homes in
this
 arena will definitely contribute t
o the
Suggestion
houses
ir haleness
However
, the school of thoughts who believe that there should be preference
f
Suggestion
with
or
this
 geological zone by not establishing homes on them; may be for a reason pointing to it been remarkably good for tourism,i strongly oppose because it will be of note that it is
also
 a reserved area for the dwelling of mankind to flourish In conclusion, even though it is considered that securing country side by not building house on them is important, exploring it for the usefulness of man by putting up apartments on them outweighs its preservation

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