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Some think that it is better to get information or advice from other people, while others believe one can get any information or advice from the Internet or books. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s modern world, acquiring correct
information
 plays a crucial role in the efficacious presence of us in society. While some argue it can be obtained via asking around, others are concerned that we can through exercising the internet, social media and books achieve to
information
Suggestion
inform
. The aim of
this
 essay is to explore two opposing viewpoints, and
then
 render my own perspective. On the one hand, there are people who claim that banking on people’s
information
 is sufficient. If enquirers are not able to find
sagacious person
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a sagacious person
,
i
reflexive form of "me"
myself
I
me
.e.
who
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Who
 is a professional expertise in the field of question, imparting erroneous or flawed knowledge to others will possibly cause irreparable damage to their reputation.
For instance
, some presidents always say they
tackle
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are tackling
 the phenomenon of unemployment of the youth, whilst it is crystal clear which is incorrect, and
this
 wrong
information
probably originate
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probably originates
 from his dilettante and unwitting
counselors
someone who gives advice about problems
counsellors
.
On the other hand
, some people argue that they are more convenient to surf the Net or take themselves avail of books, magazines and etc.
to
Suggestion
To
 find
answer
Suggestion
answers
of
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to
 their questions. To them it is not only a searchable and fast way, but
also
 the wisest and the most prudent method because they can communicate with more people. On top of these, people can get their required
information
 just through putting enquiry in
web forum
Suggestion
web forums
a web forum
 to know others opinions.
As a result
 of which, people will tend to reach to the correct
information
 as well as fortify and underpin their claim when presenting. Taking the above mentioned points into account, it is my belief that the best method is to use the internet and books to get
information
. It is because we can acquire more other perspective about our question.
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