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Many people try to find a balance between their work and other aspects of their life. However, few actually achieve this. What solutions can you suggest?

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Work
 life
balance
 has become a food for thought in recent times. Most workers spend more
time
 at
work
 due to the reward system.
This
 essay will examine the causes and
then
 profound solutions to them. Admittedly, most workers struggle to
balance
work
 with other aspects of their life due to a myriad of
reasons but
Accept comma addition
reasons, but
focus
Suggestion
the focus
 here will be on only two.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
the reward system in most organisations
favors
promote over another
favours
 long working hours rather than
productivity
. According to World bank
,
Accept space
,
workers are only productive for just fifty percent of
time
 spent at
Work
.
Secondly
, the workplace has become a place of psychological refuge for workers, a United nations research states that eighty percent of professionals have no personal identity outside the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
thus
 explaining attachment to
work
. Having looked at causes above, two main solutions will be propounded which are changing orientations and policies. Reward system should be
productivity
 based rather than long hours,
this
 will drive a culture of creativity at
work
 rather than logging huge hours at
work
.
Secondly
 organisations should mandate vacation times for employees and discourage overtime rewards. When workers are mandated to go on vacation and they are being paid, it gives them adequate
time
 to recharge,
balance
 other aspects of their lives which will in turn increase
productivity
 eventually. In conclusion, if workers are being rewarded based on
productivity
 and
time
 offs are adequately paid,
this
 will aid employees to
balance
 other aspects of their lives and
thus
 increase
productivity
.

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