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Learning English language at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local language and, if so, how?

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Undoubtedly, English
Undoubtedly English
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become
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becoming
 as predominant
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 all over the world.
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 I accept that learning English is the basis need of life in these days,
importance
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the importance
 of
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the local language
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 can not be neglected. There is no denying the fact that English is a compulsory subject in school curriculum. Nowadays, most of people are learning
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language
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 because it needs in each and every
sector whether
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sector, whether
 it is related to business or social life. To exemplify
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, most of multinational companies give most preferences to English speaker
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rather
 than
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others
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language
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. If a person
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has
is having
 great command over
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language
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language, then
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 it is very convenient for him to find a job. Because proficiency in
English give
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English, give
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at or in the front
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the other
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 to
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, English linguistic people are able to communicate everywhere, it helps them to not only understand
other
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another
 person communication but
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a common interest
 with each other. In short, English plays a vital role in socialisation.
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, due to the rate at which the importance of English is becoming increasing
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,
it
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puts
 other languages in danger.
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 means that
culture
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cultural
 traditions are
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 losing. In
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 way, people are not able to see their cultural roots in future.Every
language
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 is related to different cultures, so
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 trend
give
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gives
 a great impact on traditional values. In my opinion, it is essential to preserve local languages in order to save our culture.It is the responsibility of both individuals and government. Government should give fund to educational institutions to promote native languages and individuals should should on
regular basis
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a regular basis
 of their mother tongue to save
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that English recognised as
global
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a global language
the global language
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So it is important.
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, to save our cultural roots government should implement some measures to save
locals
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local
 languages.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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