There is a growing evidence that man made activities are making global temperatures higher. what might be the man-made causes of temperature rising? How should we deal with this problem?

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Rise in global temperature is a major concern that

world

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the world

is facing today,

this

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is a phenomena under which the

temrature

the degree of hotness or coldness of a body or environment (corresponding to its molecular activity)

temperature

of earth rises at

very high rate

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a very high rate

this

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activity is

also

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known as global warming. Man made activities is the main reason behind it among few natural causes. Man made activities like industrialization, transportation causes global temperature rise,

on the other

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hand exploitation

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hand, exploitation

of natural resources Weakens the ability for

earth

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the earth

to heal.

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the rate at which the global

temrature

the degree of hotness or coldness of a body or environment (corresponding to its molecular activity)

temperature

is rising there is a strict need for action.

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the environmental laws are made, as

global temperature rise

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the global temperature rise

or global warming is something that in some way or other is impacting all of the countries in the world,

thus

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making countries go hand in hand to address the issues. Over

last

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few

decades industries

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decades, industries

in various sectors have to get government approval for carrying out activities that will impact the global warming, and

auto industry

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the auto industry

are very rule

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is very ruling

bound about the automobiles produced. Among measures taken by government, private organizations and non government bodies are

also

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trying the address the issues. Many organizations are investing to find solutions for the problem.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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194 words

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There is a growing evidence that man made activities are making global temperatures higher. what might be the man-made causes of temperature rising? How should we deal with this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

School curriculum has become more flexible in many countr ies. Some people argue that students should be given a right to choose what they study in school. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

Some people find it difficult to manage their money. How could the government help prevent debt problems and support such people?

Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve the problem?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some believe that installing CCTVs in high crime areas help to reduce crime. What are the advantages of this?