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Band 4.5

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree?

Developing
countries
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 have always been
wealthy
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rich
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 with a large proportion of natural resources
,
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apply
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 and a higher standard in their public sector. Some people argue that their wealth should be used to help developing
countries
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. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 viewpoint. One major point to note is that helping the poor country will help in developing those
countries
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,
this
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 can be done through the help of grants support in their public sector,
Education
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 especially will be a huge help when assistance is gotten in
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 part because
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 will help train the young people of the city, so they will be able to give back to their society.
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,
this
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 will
also
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 lead to a friendship point between the two
countries
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.
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, in a survey carried out, it was discovered that the rate at which the standard of a developing country is increased is twice when they are assisted specifically in the
education
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section
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sector
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. Another benefit
to
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is the trade opportunities
this
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open
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opens
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 up between the
nation
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nations
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.
This
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 opportunity can be available when the
countries
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 of lesser standard are exposed to the assistance of the great nations. Chances to export their local products
is
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are
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 available
which
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, which
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 will bridge the gap with other
countries
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.
For instance
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,
It
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it
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 was discovered that when developing
countries
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 start to export their products, it
also
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 raises their standard of living as the majority of them are favoured in farm products which they cultivated. In conclusion, assisting developing
countries
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 through their public administration in terms of
education
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 and health care will greatly improve the standard of
such
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province
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provinces
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. In my opinion, I support that the
countries
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 should be helped through their health and
education
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sections
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sectors
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.

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structure
Make clear your main idea in one line at the start of each paragraph.
style
Use simple and clear words. Avoid long, run-on sentences.
examples
Give real examples or numbers and explain how they show your point.
grammar
Check grammar and spell words correctly; 'developing countries are not rich' is better than 'developing countries have always been wealthy'.
cohesion
Link ideas with clear joining words (also, because, as a result).
content
The writer has a clear position and stays with it.
content
There is a good attempt to explain benefits of aid in education and trade.
tone
There is a sense of purpose and motivation in the writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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