In some countries the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem

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Reducing of visiting to
art
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galleries are
happenig
an event that happens
happening
, since few amount of people are taking
interset
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
in it. Hectic jobs can be a blocker. I think main source is people is having no attraction towards
art
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.
Solution
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The solution
for
this
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case is developing
worthy nature
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a worthy nature
in beings will surely help.
Firstly
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,
art
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gallery grip is getting
weaker which
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weaker, which
resulted in
decrease
Suggestion
a decrease
the decrease
of visitation.
New generation
Suggestion
A new generation
The new generation
have
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has
different mindset
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a different mindset
as compared to
old breed
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the old breed
since
this
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new era where
adaption
the act of accepting with approval; favorable reception
adoption
adaptation
of
alter
Suggestion
altering
ways have taken where artistic work does not holds stage. Even though
versitile
having great diversity or variety
versatile
human's only bear
fad
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
of technology, trend and media they are pursuing it blindly.
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Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, Because of
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science actions which was
a
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an
invasion on old traditions that eliminated "The
Art
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" which was once a
prasing
the grouping of musical phrases in a melodic line
phrasing
praising
element. Simply I say technology is enjoying widespread fame
on the other hand
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the talent of
person
the language of Persia (Iran) in any of its ancient forms
Persian
art
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is being ignored.
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matter of neglecting
art
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is
a
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an
issue which is hard to handle.
This
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can solve by planting roots of fine
art
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in
conscience
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the conscience
of our
descencants
all of the offspring of a given progenitor
descendants
. We have to push them beyond the
norm
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norm, however
however
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it seems tough as thriving infatuation for something which is
outdated thing
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an outdated thing
in
this
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universe. Representing
epitomy
Suggestion
saying, in order to
accompolish
put in effect
accomplish
the goal of rising
art
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exibitions
the act of exhibiting
exhibitions
again is possible by
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
ruiner
destroyed physically or morally
ruined
The Media. Media can aware them regarding
art
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. When public will know how illusion speaks in the image
if
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of
painting they will be dragged automatically to those empty hall's. In the end
stablishing
set up or found
establishing
paint workshops frequently will make students ambitious in
this
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particular criteria. In conclusion technology unknowingly excluded artistic
workforce which
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workforce, which
was
a
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an
aroma of life in
this
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world. In order to make
art
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galleries live
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galleries, live
agian
another time, repeating
again
conveyinf
act of transferring property title from one person to another
conveying
measage
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
through
main stream
the prevailing current of thought
mainstream
media of how unique and novel those
colorly
without doubt or question
clearly
sheets are will be helping hand.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital era
  • online galleries
  • allure
  • economic factors
  • cultural pursuits
  • societal interests
  • innovative
  • engaging exhibitions
  • virtual reality (VR) experiences
  • accessible
  • contemporary
  • promote
  • art education
  • awareness
  • foster
  • appreciation
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