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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Cooking is thought by numerous people as an important basic
skill
 that must be educated with children in the academy, while some people think that it is wasting time in school. In my opinion, I completely agree that learning to cook is a significant
skill
 which should be learned by kids in school. People whether adults or kids, they live through the day by consuming
food
 and drinks, but the difference between
food
 and drinks is that drinks did not require any
skill
 to obtain, while
food
 required ability to cook, and by cooking it is
also
 included an ability to know which ingredients are edible. By that reason, if children had no
skill
 in cooking, it can bring bad things to the kids.
For example
, allergies to
food
 or something worse than that which can be a life-threatening situation.
Furthermore
, kids go to academy to
collected
Suggestion
collect
 everything they could, and cooking is a real-life career, by
this
 class, it will create more job for youngsters.
However
, teaching kids a cooking class could be a waste of the valuable time, because from the moment and in the future, there will be much more fast
food
 and
food
 ready to eat, which can be bought from the convenience store, or being delivered by a delivery business. The main reason community markets business is dying can refer that people are not interested in cooking anymore.
Therefore
, teaching youngsters while cooking trend is going downward will benefit no kids at all. In conclusion, by the year 2019, we cannot predict how cooking will be in the future, and from the point of advantages and disadvantages of learning a cooking
skill
, it still has better to educate them than leaving it behind.
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