Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

In the past
,
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,
people used to do daily activities on their own,
as
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at
the
time
changed the way of living
also
changed, now a days we are using electronic equipments like washing
machine
,
hand-held
small and light enough to be operated while you hold it in your hands
handheld
mixer, vacuum cleaner e.t.c. By using these we can save
time
and do some productive
work
. Every coin has two faces, there are some cons
also
, by utilizing these home appliances
alot
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a lot
of
energy
is consumed.
Firstly
, let's discuss the positive traits, in
this
modern world women are
also
going to
work
, it is more useful for them so that they can complete the daily chores in
time
and leave for
work
. After coming from
work
they just switch on the
machine
and can spend some
time
with their children and other family members.
Secondly
, the burden will be reduced to some extent not completely. Previously we
used wash our
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used to wash our
clothes there is so much of
time
consuming, but now the
machine
does 75% of the
work
only drying the clothes part is to be done by us. Every one can buy these products as they became affordable to everyone.
Moreover
, as earlier said these products consume more
energy
and
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
the environment and creating health problems. For
small chores
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the small chores
also
they are using
machines
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machines, for
for example
, dough maker, it is used to knead the dough, we can knead by ourselves by doing in
this
way some hand exercise will be there by
this
blood can circulate to every part of the body
.
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.
Not only
this
the refrigerator releases
chloro
-
fluoro
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Fluoro
carbon
gases which
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gases, which
leads to depletion of
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
, which acts as a barrier between
sun
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the sun
and earth, as sun rays contains of UV rays. If
this
layer is not
there
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there, then
then
the UV rays direct fall on human
skin which
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skin, which
leads to cancer and other skin diseases.
However if
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However, if
more
energy
is consumed there won’t be any
energy
and fuel for our future generations. I conclude that, depending completely on a
machine
is not good, a few things we can't avoid but using them appropriately makes life easier. We need to balance
eco-system
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the eco - system
too.
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