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People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it? The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it? The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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 illustrated chart graph shows the age of 65aged
peple
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people
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 between 1940 to 2040. during 1940 the
population
 of 65aged
people
 was less than 10%. as after 20years it
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populated
 increased age to 10%,
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 again in
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20 years
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population
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 age
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 10% or equal to 15%. in 19780 USA's
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and
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population
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then
than
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 % got reduced to less
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than
 15%
then
 it has maintained its record
upto
 2020 but there is an
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a prediction
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 that
USA
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the USA
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 will have 65aged
pepke
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people
 more than 20% by 2040. in
sweden
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Sweden
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 they have more than 5% 65aged
people
 in 1940
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and later
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 in 1960 that number
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upto
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up to
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 1960, and after 20yaers
sweden
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 has reached 15% of the total
population
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 65aged
people
, in 2000
total
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the total
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 aged
people
 was less than 20% but by 2020 it will reach 20%, and there is
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 prediction that it
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will
 reach it % by 25% by 2040 in japan starting the aged
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less
 than 65%and they ave maintained
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 graph till 1980 but in 2000 it has become
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exact
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 5% and by 2020
theey
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they
 will reach
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 10% and
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the prediction
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 for 2040 is they will reach
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 number of more than 25%.

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