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some people think that money is best gift for teenagers. others disagree. Discuss both there views and give your opinion

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In the 21st century,
money
 is
gift
 for any age people, not limited to only teenagers. Lot's of people think that
money
 is the best things for youngsters, But all people not agree with it.
This
 essay will describe why
money
 is important for youngsters. On the
first
 side,
money
 is everything for anyone in their teenage. Because teenagers require more
money
 than any other age people. They focus on their career. Nowadays education is very costly and
also
 in developing countries, there are two types of student groups. One from rich family and other from poor family. So not only for study, but staying in university with new gadgets, clothes, cars as well as during their college
,
Accept space
,
they require lots of finance for cultural activity, sports and extra learning opportunity outside. So I think, why
money
 is everything for teenagers. Other side, some people
do not agree
Suggestion
does not agree
 because they think whatever financial aid for teenagers, they could get from education loan, from their parents. They
also
 think that most teenagers waste their extra
money
 like they get from the
gift
 at needless places like dance-bar, weekend trips, drugs and drinks. So they don't give
money
 as a
gift
.
Although
such
 people don't consider teenagers financial condition. So they are sometimes wrong. As per my opinion,
Firstly
 we should have to know the teenagers background nature for career or business, and give
money
 as a
gift
. If teenagers do not use finance at appropriate way,
money
 definitely is not best for them.
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