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It is thought by some that its better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#city #life #countryside
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Recently
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people
are migrating
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have migrated
 from one place to another.Some individuals think that urban
life
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 is better as
comapred
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compared
 to rural
life
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. In
this
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 essay both sides will be discussed and in the conclusion part my opinion will be presented. In the present world
,
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younger generation
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the younger generation
are migrated
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is migrated
 more into
city
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life
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 in terms of employment.Employment
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
are
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is
 more which attract youth to settle in the
city
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.
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,
One
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 great advantage of
city
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life
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 is public transport
.
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.
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, recent surveys have claimed that for better livelihood people are moving from countryside to
downtowns
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downtown
downturns
donations
 due to various job
oppertunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 as well as transportation
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fascility
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 provided by the public
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.
Eventhough
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Even though
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,
Those who care about
environment prefer
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environment, prefer
 to stay at
rural
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the rural side
side
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 of the
city
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. As compared to
city
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, country
side
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 are not much polluted
becaue
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of inadequate transport
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fascility
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facility
facilities
.
In addition
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,
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,
Due to less population these places are very calm and
quiet which
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quiet, which
 in terms of saving from
noice
sound of any kind (especially unintelligible or dissonant sound)
noise
 pollution.
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, In Canada 95 percent of the people who are above 60 years of age prefer to live in rural population due to environmental problems which causes health issues
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To stay
at
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on
in
better
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the good
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side they
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side, they
 prefer
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
. To sum up
,
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,
In my opinion
city
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life
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 will be better for the present generation because of
job oppertunity
Suggestion
a job opportunity
job opportunity
job opportunities
 as well as transport
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fascility
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
.
However
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,
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,
country
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the country side
side
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 is
also
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 better to
stay but
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stay, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would not prefer because of low jobs as well as transportation
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fascility
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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