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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Nowadays, it is believed that new houses need to be
constructed but
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constructed, but
 the only place
that is
 left for construction is in
Villages
Suggestion
the Villages
. Many people think that the
countryside
 should not be used to construct homes and they should be protected to preserve the country's assets. In my opinion, new houses have to be built in the
countryside
 to a limited
extent so
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extent, so
 that it reduces homeless people and it is
also
 important to preserve the
countryside
 as they are a primary location for Wild Life. Over the past 2years, there has been an abnormal increase in the number of homeless people. By making the use of the
countryside
 and we can build new houses to accommodate the people that don't have shelter.
This
 will decrease the number of homeless people that lack shelter.
Australian Government
Suggestion
The Australian Government
 has recently taken an initiative to build homes in their
countryside
 and the average of homeless people across the nation has fallen by 10% in one year. One of the reasons construction in the
countryside
 has to be limited because wildlife may become extinct. It is often believed that most of the wildlife resides in
Countryside
 that includes forests. To build homes, these forest lands need to be cleared which will be a big threat to wildlife.
For example
, Texas times published an article where it showed an increase in the building construction in India had an adverse effect on their Wild Life making them extinct. In conclusion, many people believe that more homes must be built in the
countryside
 as
that is
 the only place left.
This
 idea is true to some extent as it helps to provide shelter to many homeless
people
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people, however
however
this
 could be a threat to the wild animals
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