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Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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Fast
food
 consumption is growing day by day in urban as well as semi urban and rural areas. I agree to the point that fast
food
 we eat on
regular basis
Suggestion
a regular basis
 or
everyday
Suggestion
every day
 for some people will have bad effects on your health, lifestyle and will ruin your diet. The popularity of fast
food
 has grown leaps and bounds. Everyone like the spicy and tangy
last
 which they can't get in some made
food
. But when we consume fast
food
 it creates a lot of problems like health issues and can cause
deseaes
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
 if the
food
 producing shops have not followed proper hygiene.. Obesity is one of the
mojor
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
Major
majors
 concern now a days and fast
food
 has a major share in making people obese. In olden days people prefer home cooked
food
. But companies like McDonald's, pizza hut and many more made people there slave. Eating fast
food
 once in a while will cause less harmful effects on your
body but
Accept comma addition
body, but
 the products used in fast
food
 makes people addicted to it. In
USA 50%
Suggestion
the USA 50 %
 of people who eat fast
food
 are fat or you can call
th
definite article
the
 obese. People who follow
good diet
Suggestion
a good diet
 and lifestyle has chance chance of getting out of
shop
Suggestion
the shop
a shop
. In the conclusion, I would like to say that it's ok to have fast
food
 once in a while but don't make it your lifestyle. It won't show every bad
effects
Suggestion
effect
 while you are
young but
Accept comma addition
young, but
 it will cause problem soon
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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