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Should young people follow older people’s example or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With vast exposure to technology and other cultures
,
Accept space
,
 people rekindled their thought process and
hence
 are open to new experiences, ideas and adventures.
On the contrary
, golden-
agers
an ancient port on the Mediterranean; the capital and largest city of Algeria
Algiers
augers
ages
 believe in playing it safe, by following tested and approved practices.
Although
, there is no
right
Suggestion
Right
 way of doing things,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that challenging older people's opinions, is not wrong provided there are better alternatives to traditional approach. Our previous generations have limited resources available at hand,
hence
 they are very keen while making a decision related to career or family. Since they are elder to us, the experience gained by them shall help
younger generation
Suggestion
the younger generation
 to take a quick and informed decision.
For example
, an educated parent can provide knowledge and his understandings to his/her child in choosing their career.

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