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Your colleague found another job and invited you to his/her farewell party. Unfortunately you are unable to attend it. Write a letter to him/her and say – Why can’t you attend the party? – Why did you enjoy working with him/her? – Offer him/her to meet some other time.

#colleague #job #farewell #party #can’t #offer #time
Dear Smith, I am writing
this
 letter with
the
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 heavy heart as I am going to
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lose
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loose
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lose
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best
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 colleague and best soul that I had ever seen in my life. I am more than happy
for
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 your new opportunity,but accept my deep apology as I am not able to make
to
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 your farewell function as I have to pick up my parents from the airport on the same day. As you're aware of since
last
 summer my parents are thinking about
to move
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 with me so we both can feel
as
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family
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 and could spend some quality time together. So they have decided to come here on 20th of march and they will be landing
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to
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 Airport around 4:30PM. I always found you helping others as well me in every possible way you can.
Moreover
,your calm and
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quite
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nature
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 with
the
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 great sense of humour is like
cherry
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the cherry
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 on the cake. I will definitely
going
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 to miss your absence. I have
plan
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 to make up for not attending
function
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the function
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. Let's hang out someday near to
next
 weekend at my house as by that time my parents
also
 will settle down with
environment
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 of the town. As you knew they always wanted you to meet. Your house is not that
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far from mine. Again,I am really sorry for that. Wish you have a great future and continue growing as a person and career. Yours Faithfully, Robert
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