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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people often face problematic situations in their life. Some masses think that it is good to sacrifice with their dreams by accepting awful things while others believe to try to overcome the problems and get the best result in the future.
This
 essay will elucidate both the views so that a plausible conclusion can be formed. I personally agree with the
second
 view. On one hand, sometimes people have to assent the terrible situations to have stable income and comfort in their life.
For example
, a university graduated student who is trying to get relevant skilled jobs, he may not get that kind of job so that he might be working in other fields with underpay to fulfil their needs.
Furthermore
, earning less money can give us more happiness rather than doing any illegal activities to earn a lot of money.
Hence
, accepting the bad things make you more comfort
instead
 of rejecting it make the
such
 vast ambitions in the future.
On the other hand
, some masses define that the best way to handle with bad things is always trying to improve it and make it better. Everyone knows that hard work is the key of success, so that if we put some efforts to solve the problem may get good results in the future.
For instance
, my neighbourhood's son wants to take admission in University. He belongs to a poor family and his parents cannot afford too much expense of his study, but due to his hard work in a study he got a scholarship for
further
 study at university. He is a doctor now and able to fulfil his parents' dreams as well. To recapitulate, it can be concluded that people would know which is better the result of accepting the bad situation or try to improve the situation because nothing is impossible in
this
 world. Both views have own physical and mental benefits, but I opine that always try to put efforts to make the things better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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