In many places,new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the country side.Some people believed it is more important to protect the country side and not build new homes What is your opinion about this.

Although
,
new residence
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the new residence
are wanted
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is wanted
in several places and the only unoccupied zone to erect them are the rural part of the country. Some school of thought believed it is Paramount to protect
this
landscape and not use for accommodation purposes
,
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,
which I strongly agree with. To start with, countryside are beautiful reserved area to
visit especially
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visit, especially
for tourism as it is serene and far away from city bustling life.
For example
,
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,
family visiting a country for the
first
time ever and needed a region of the nation for sight seeing with less population of people with the advantage of seeing few unarmed
animal
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animals
that resides at the backwoods will appreciate
this
as it will be
preserve
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preserved
for
this
function.
Similarly
, erecting structures on
this
landscape will be disadvantageous to the natural growing plants which are consumed by the masses because they will have to compete for space.
For instance
, there are nutritious vegetables that
grows
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grow
in
this
sector because of the texture of the soil
,
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,
these food
substance
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substances
enriched the body as it
grown
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has grown
is grown
grew
and
nutured
fully ripe; at the height of bloom
matured
under natural fresh air without pollution and good land. In contrary
,
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,
even though
new accommodation
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the new accommodation
are needed
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is needed
by people for the purpose of living may be due to congestion of the urban area
,
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,
the rural part of the country must still be protected. To conclude,
overtim
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over time
e more houses will be needed to accommodate people as the population is increasing and the only accessible sector will be the un-urbanized district, the need to reserve
this
quarter is way above
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
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for homes
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