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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
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Owing to the harm smoking causes passive individuals,
as a result
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 of
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, a handful of countries have taken up the responsibility to ban smoking in public places. I strongly agree with
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 major step as it will reduce hospitalizations and improve general
health
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.
To begin
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 with,
second
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 hand smoke which consists of carcinogenic components, has serious negative
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 consequences that could harm lives permanently and individuals could develop cancers of the lungs, mouth and throat
as a result
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 of inhalation. Research has found that banning smoking in public places can reduce heart attack hospitalizations by 50%.
In addition
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, the lingering
odor
any property detected by the olfactory system
odour
 of stale cigarettes in open places tends to linger
on
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in
 people's hair and clothes and takes longer to fade even while the offending party has left. Another point to consider is the right of the employer to provide a safe and healthy environment for its employees. Studies have shown that smoke free laws that prohibit smoking in public places like bars and restaurants help improve the
health
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 of workers and the general population.
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, smokers do not adequately dispose
off
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of
 the cigarette butt which has resulted in the littering of attractive buildings and the surrounding landscape.
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, smoking in open facilities promotes a negative impact to the young ones which are admittedly learning from the elder ones. In conclusion, despite the fact that smokers are aware of the disastrous consequences of smoking,
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, it is clear that individuals should be made to exit the facility if they need to smoke because
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 would improve the
health
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 of thousands of people.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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