TOPIC 12: Some businesses find that new employees finishing education lack basic interpersonal ability such as working with others as a part of a team. What do you think are the causes of this problem? How to solve this problem?

Organizations play an important role in shaping career of the fresh graduates. As soon as the university finishes, it is
top priority
Suggestion
the top priority
a top priority
of the graduate to get hired by a well reputed company. Since, they just step
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
the professional life, they are not aware of the organizational world and it gives a problem to the company. In recent times, companies have started facing issues with the behaviours of the new employees. Working in a
team
is very important to increase productivity of
work
and working in a
team
also
creates problems due to the behaviour of individuals. One of the main reasons is that people have become less tolerant now. They do not tolerate dominance of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
employee.
On the other hand
, there are employees who do not own their
work
while working in a
team
and it is easy for them to put
blame
Suggestion
the blame
on others. While working in
team
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a team
teams
the team
they are dependant on each other and expecting others to put more effort and energy.
Moreover
, employees bring their personal issues to
work
which
effects
have an effect upon
affects
their mood
team
work
is
suffered
Suggestion
suffering
.
Team
work
can be
imporoved
made more desirable or valuable or profitable; especially made ready for use or marketing
improved
by giving a comfortable and easy working
environement
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
. Delegation of
work
is very important to make decisions while working in a
team
.
Moreover
, trainings should be organized to improve human
behivour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and handling pressure during peak time.
Also
, it is very important to respect each other as a human being as well as a colleague. I believe that if every employee owns his workplace and
work
with keeping the interest of
orgainzation
Suggestion
the organization
organization
organizations
organisations
in his
mind
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mind, then
then
there will be less conflicts and working
enviornoment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
environments
will be healthy.

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