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Some people believe city life is getting more difficult whereas others think it’s becoming easier. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Industrialization and technological advancements
has impacted
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have impacted
 people’s lives and bought various changes in their lifestyle, we are living a life
that is
 even better than a king of
18th century
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the 18th century
. Living in
city
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the city
a city
 has become much
harder according to
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harder, according to
 some people, while others believe the style of living is relaxed. In
this
 essay I will discuss both the sides and will
also
 provide my opinion. As technology is growing day by day, the society is feeling the breeze of the technological advancements.
To begin
 with, a part of
population
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the population
 is not able to completely understand the new systems introduced into their lives.
Furthermore
, the changes for them are much more rapid compared to the earlier time.
For example
, elder population often feels the life in the city has turned hard and fast due to
less usage
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less use
 of older technologies.
On the other hand
, a group of people is feeling relaxed as the communication has become easier via telephones and
internet
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the internet
, which has bought everyone closer to each other.
Additionally
, a person familiar to internet does not even need to step out of the house to purchase things or for bank transactions. To illustrate, young population prefers shopping through
internet
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the internet
, rather than going out for shopping. In conclusion, there are all different kinds of people
in the world some
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in the world, some
likes
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like
 the hustle of metros and some wants to remain at ease and in their own comfort zone. Though city life is fast paced I believe it is getting
smooth
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smoother
 and we are moving towards progress very quickly.

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