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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

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The preference for small sized family
around the
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around, the
 universe is on the increase as opposed to a large sized family. The benefits of having a small
family
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family, such
such
 as
efficient spread
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the efficient spread
 of resources
and and
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and
 other values it brings, but there are
also
 drawbacks to
this
 choice of family size. Having a small family ensures the available resources are efficient to cater for the needs of the family members, they are not deprived of decent standards of living.
For example
, a middle class family of 4 including both Parents avails their children the opportunity to get the best of education.
Furthermore
, catering for small number of persons in the family is less burdensome in terms of cooking, doing wishes and other related chores within the home.
In addition
, instilling discipline in a small sized family becomes a walk in the park as it’s easier to monitor the movements of one another in the family. An example of
this
 is my
family we
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family, we
 are a family of 2 and my dad played a good role of a disciplinarian.
On the other hand
, children raised in
small
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a small
 sized family tend to lack interpersonal relationship as they do not have many people around them to talk to, they are overly monitored and have no circle of friends.
Similarly
, wards of small sized have a tendency of being uncultured or somewhat spoilt.
For example
, 65% of persons who are the only child of their parents often have no friends because of excessive
protection
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protection, hence
hence
 have little or no interaction with other and turn out to have issue with interpersonal relationship which is always obvious
at
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in
 their places of work.
Additionally
, loneliness can be the other of the day for a small sized family. In conclusion, even though having a small family is beneficial owing to the ability to monitor and cater for the children with adequate resources, the drawbacks
such
 as affecting interpersonal relationship is to be taken account of.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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