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In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages?

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The idea of eating a wide variety of
food
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 grown in other areas is in people's mind. As a consequence, people would like to eat
food
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 produced in other nations rather than local
food
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.
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 there are some drawbacks of
this
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trend
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, I would argue that there are some more benefits. On the one hand,
this
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trend
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 will provide a diverse number of products
for
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from
 local countries. In fact, people could buy a lot of foods which are not produced in their country or
are as
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
areas
 not good as other countries.
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as
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As
 a result, people will enjoy
better quality
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a better quality
 of life.
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, In Viet Nam, a wide range of fruits
are imported
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is imported
 from foreign
countries especially
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countries, especially
 in
Europe
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Europe, such
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 as: Germany, France,
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 they will have more choices in purchasing fruits with high quality and high satisfaction.
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, with exchanging products among regions will help the economic development. Because
this
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indeed increases
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has indeed increased
 the economic output and relationships among nations to motivate exportation.
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, rice in Viet Nam
are exported
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is exported
 to Europe leads to Viet Nam ranks number 2 in rice exporting in the world, so the
economic
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economy
 in Viet Nam is on significant growth.
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, foods are imported from other countries are as not fresh as local country due to
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this
plural of "this"
these
 foods have to be transported in a long time with long distance.
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, the fruits might get rotten and other foods go off, it is a negative
effects
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effect
 for local's finance.
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, the
food
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 of a region reflects its customs and cultures, if people continue importing a lot of foods from other regions, some local special
food
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 may diminish which would be loss of
food
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 culture. In conclusion, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
 that eating more foods from other regions than local foods brings a lot of benefits, but the disadvantages of
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 should be taken into consideration.

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