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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I disagree by the statement
technology
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 will solve environmental problems which world faces today because
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these environmental hazards are caused by rapid growth in
technology
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 and modern lifestyle we love to live in. It
is seen
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has been seen
 by period of time since
18th century
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the 18th century
 as industrial revolution
rised
located or moved above the surround or above the normal position
raised
risen
 globally major
enviromental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 problems started arising.
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The increase
 in
technology
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 has improvise mass media worldwide. In order to tackle climatic changes and global
warming we
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warming, we
 can widespread our ideology of living and loving the nature and using of natural resources efficiently but seems very difficult to control environmental problems. It can be reduced to smaller
extent but
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extent, but
 it can't be completely solved with the help of
technology
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. Worldwide rising population
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daily lifestyle, mass industrial productions, excessive use of vehicles and other transportation, communication towers, under ocean cables
depicts
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depict
 our growth in
technology
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 due to which percentage of carbon
dioxid e
an oxide containing two atoms of oxygen in the molecule
dioxide
 increased leading to rise in temperature. As history states, during world war 2 the massacre of nuclear explosions in Hiroshima & Nagasaki was a big environmental haphazard on earth. Nuclear radiations
devasted
zealous in devotion or affection
devoted
 Japan and its generations & affects are still notable.
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 happened because of advancement of
technology
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. Even though we as
technological
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technology
 experts can't control natural disasters like Tsunami
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Earthquakes, Floods, etc.
but
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But
 we can utilise the knowledge in our precaution and general awareness In order to control environmental problems not
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technology but
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technology, but
 we as a human should solve the problems. Plant maximum number of trees, change our lifestyle and we should create maximum awareness socially to protect our Mother Earth and give best for future generations.
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