In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is a killer disease and deteriorates human
health
severly
to a severe or serious degree
severely
. It not only affects the
smoker but
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smoker, but
the
pasive
lacking in energy or will
passive
person too. While in many
countries there
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countries, there
is a ban on smoking in
pulblic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
areas
.
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.
However many
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However, many
suggest that smokers whenever had the desire to smoke should leave the public
Premisis
Suggestion
Premises
. Whereas
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am
concerend
feeling or showing worry or solicitude
concerned
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree with
this
notion.
This
essay will examine my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
in the following paragraphs along with the conclusion. Banning smoking in public region is a great measure taken by the government to overcome
health
problems of the civilians.
However after
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However, after
given
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giving
tremendous warnings by
health
memebers
one of the persons who compose a social group (especially individuals who have joined and participate in a group organization)
members
,
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,
still its not
haulted
cause to stop
halted
heated
hated
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
eventualy
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
eventually
officials put a complete ban on
smoke
Suggestion
smoking
on
pulbic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
areas in order to save the
peope
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
from the risk of diseases caused by smoking
.
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.
For example
a recent study done by
health
today revealed that the smoke emitted from one
cigrette
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarette
suffocate
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suffocates
the lungs of 2-3 passive smokers along with the smokers itself
.
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.
Thus in
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Thus, in
general the both the smoker as
wel
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
as the passive smoker is equally affected from the fumes of tobacco.
Moreover
the other reasons to curtail smoking in public regions is that in some misfortune times due to minor
neglegency
failure to act with the prudence that a reasonable person would exercise under the same circumstances
negligence
while smoking or discarding it in wrong manner may lead to
fire blaze
Suggestion
a fire blaze
which may result in
destruction
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the destruction
of the public property or may turn into
cassualities
someone injured or killed or captured or missing in a military engagement
casualties
risking the life of the people
.
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.
Specially near the combustible places
such
as hospital
premisis
land and the buildings on it
premises
, storage blocks, petrol pumps or gas
engencies
an administrative unit of government
agencies
.
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.
Thus
associating
such
factors
this
ban is acceptable by many people. To conclude, seeing all the
illeffects
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ill effects
caused by smoking in public
places i
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places, I
places I
completely
favor
promote over another
favour
this
wise decision of the authorities and want that public should
also
implement it strictly So avoid any future problems caused by smoking
.
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.

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