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Nowadays more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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One of the more recent environmental topics, that has been discussed, is who has responsibility for product packaging; is it those that make it and sell it, or those that buy it? The following essay will go both sides of
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 and explain why I believe it should be the manufacturers/sellers that should take on the responsibility of reducing the packing with products. Let
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 look at the consumers. When people buy a product, whether
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 of bread or an iPhone, they don’t have any choice about how much packaging is used. They can choose not to buy a particular product if they feel that the producers use too much, but in my opinion,
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 as most people either won’t even think about the packaging, or if they do, won’t be too bothered
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, I firmly believe that the companies that produce and sell packaging should be the ones responsible for limiting the waste packing that enters the environment rather than the consumer, as they have no control over the amount used.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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