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In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better?

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The time people stay with an organisation is gradually changing. While in years back people spent the majority of their working as an employee of a company, at present, people tend to be mobile in their working life as they
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 from one establishment to another.
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 essay will discuss the merits and demerits of staying in a single employment as well as the benefits and drawbacks for changing jobs and give my opinion on which side is better. On one hand, some people prefer to stay with an organisation for their entire working life because of the
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 growth involved. People who stay with a company, say for over a decade, tend to have a defined
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 progression as they grow with the company. On the downside, start-up businesses tend to recruit people with diverse experience when the business starts expanding. A recent study found that start-up businesses prefer people that have worked in different organisations to join them because of the fresh perspectives
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, there are people who like changing jobs frequently as seen in recent times. One benefit of
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 is that it expands the horizon of
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 people as they are more likely to have divers experience in their working life.
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, these changes limit
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 growth as there would be a few track record to measure the
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 progression of
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 making the
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 change counterproductive. A recent research concluded that it is more beneficial to move between jobs because the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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