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In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

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With increasing employment opportunities across the world, people are finding it beneficial to move to different places,
instead
 of staying in a particular place throughout. It is quite interesting to explore and experience various cultures of many people,
hence
 people tend to move from one place to another often. Fixating at one place has its own advantages and disadvantages. Residing in single brings people closer.
For example
, in the earlier days, people preferred to be a part of joint families and owned large houses in their respective villages or towns. Moving apart from their loved ones is a taboo except in rare scenarios. Eventually,
this
 helps establishing strong connections among people.
On the other hand
, regular shifting would cost an arm and a leg.
Although
,
this
 method limits the knowledge and opportunities, people in the past, preferred a safe and secure habits over nomadic ones. Working in several cities and countries provides us with a chance to earn in dollars, thereby elevating their standard of living. As an example, a software engineer in foreign countries can own a property in a short period of time compared to an engineer in India.
Moreover
, these days people are interested to lead a lifestyle
that is
 simple and interesting.
Also
, they do not have the burden or responsibility of large families
that is
 stopping them to shift places. So, I can conclude saying that, both have their own advantages and disadvantages, and it is up on the interest of the individual to choose his life style according to the situation, and
also
, analysing the pros and cons of each.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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