the diagram shows how concentrated apple juice is produced

the diagram shows how concentrated apple juice is produced
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The given diagram illustrated how
the
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concentrated
apple
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juice is made. There are eleven main stages which consist of harvesting
apples
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, producing and packaging the
apple
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juice
then
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delivery
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it.
To begin
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with,
apples
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are harvested from the tree and picked out
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best
apples
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. Those
apples
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are received by the conveyor belt to bring to the washing and sorting step. After that, the
apples
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are put into the
apple
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grinder to cut and crush them
to
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into
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the
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apple
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slices.
Next
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, the
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apples
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slices are added to the pressing machine
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then
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and then
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to the
cetrifuger
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centrifuge
machine and the water
are
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separated from
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apple
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the apple
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concentration.
Next
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stage
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,
aroma
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is added to the concentration before the filtration
stage
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. After the filtration
stage
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, the pasteurization
stage
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is where the concentrate
are
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heated to 80°C temperature. Once
above
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the above
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steps are completed, the concentration will be moved to the
bottle filling
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bottle-filling
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stage
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and
then
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be packaged in the boxes.
Finally
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, when the bottle of concentrated
apple
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juice
are
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packaged, those boxes will be delivered to the
costumer
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customer
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words apple, apples, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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