Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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It is believed that celebrities

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as movie stars and sports personality enjoy the privileges

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provided

have been provided

are being provided

by the media. Being a celebrity has its own pros and cons.

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, I am of the opinion that celebrities have more drawbacks than benefits.

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, celebrities

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have

an image to portray. One negative impact can be devastating.

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, on the television show Koffee with Karan Hardik Pandya commented a negative remark about women.

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led to the ban of Hardik Pandya from the ongoing Australian test match series in Australia.

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, it is necessary for celebrities

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being

careful on national television.

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, fans of a particular celebrities are interested to know the life of their favourite stars. Due to which the media

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are being

always there to cover every detail of the celebrity's life.

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, Salman Khan an actor in Indian film

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industry, also

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known as Bollywood.The media covers every detailed information

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about

his private life, parties which he attends even the negative incidents

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as his break up with his partners and road accidents which he committed.

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leads to stress for celebrities as they need to be on their best behaviour when

camera

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the camera

is focused on them.

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, there is a recent trend wherein, famous, celebrities are becoming politicians.They stand for elections to become a member of

legislative assembly

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the legislative assembly

a legislative assembly

.The public always question their knowledge about politics. There are celebrities who were asked by the media about recent topics and what changes they want to implement. But, these celebrities are never able to answer these questions correctly.

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means they are not aware of the current scenario. In conclusion, celebrities

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as film stars and sports personality have an image to create in front of their audience.Once if its been tarnished they will find hard to get it back. They have to be very cautious in front of

media

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the media

.Even if they change their field and enter

politics they

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politics, they

have to maintain awareness and win

trust

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the trust

of the people.

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Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.