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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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Few companies noticed that their new workers are very poor at
team
 support and working life culture. It is very annoying to all multinational enterprises which made big impacts to their profit. There are so many reasons behind
such
 kind of poor skills for a new employee. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate with probable reasons with relevant advices.
Firstly
, people are more focussed on technical skill set.
Although
, companies are considering on the basis of academic and knowledge assessment to select employees.
For instance
, many companies are not reviewing management and personality related interviews. These are mandatory to assess the person’s attitude and supportive nature.
Secondly
, companies are maintaining fixed
work
 hours to their employees, which will impact working environment.
Consequently
, they stick with fixed timings in a
work
. They don’t want to continue a long time when the company needed at critical times.
However
, there are some solutions to improve the skills.
Initially
, each employer has to give proper training before to start a
work
.
Moreover
, they need to guide on
team
 spirit activities at training period. And
also
, the employer has to maintain a friendly working environment
to
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for
 all the workers, which involves them more at their
work
.
Finally
, companies have to conduct fun activity events once in a month
such
 as
team
 lunch, outings etc.
Consequently
, employees feel like a home to working the longer time. In conclusion, the employer are the only one not able to build
such
 skills. It has to built from a ground level which means it has to start from
college level
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the college level
. So, I would like to say that Academic teachers
are
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also be
are also being
have also been
also
 be a part to build a
such
 soft skills in college. Because, knowledge is not sufficient to get profits to all businesses. They
also
 expect coordination and
team
 spirit skills.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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