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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

#businesses #employees #lack #skills
I would like to inform that I wanted to
work
 in a client location for 6
months which
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months, which
 is located
at
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in
 United States of America. I hope that you are going to approve my travel request. As you knew that I am
involving
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involved
 on
high priority project
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a high priority project
high priority projects
 for a long time. I wanted to understand the domain knowledge about the product. So, I have to
closly
in a close relation or position in time or space
closely
work
 with clients who are operating from head office, USA.
Although
, I got to know that they are interested to
work
 with me to achieve the project
dead line
the point in time at which something must be completed
deadline
.
However
, it won’t be
impact
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impacting
 other deliverables here. I already started knowledge transfer to other colleagues. They are ready to take care of my existing
work
 here.
Moreover
, you can call any time through online. I will be available on
skype
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Skype
 24x7. To initiate VISA, I need some approvals from our team. Could you please help me to get an
approvals
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approval
 as soon as possible. And
also
, let me know which documents are required to start the process. Please email the
check list
a list of items (names or tasks etc.) to be checked or consulted
checklist
 if it is available
with
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to
 you.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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