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The following will compare and contrast the data in the chart entitled “Percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical
activity
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: 2010” where it can be seen that the general trend for both men and women is parabolic but
inverse
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the inverse
.
That is
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, women did less exercise in their youth, increased the amount during middle
age
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and
then
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did less again in later years while the male trend is the opposite.
To begin
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, while the percentage of
active men
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the active men
in the 15-24
age
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range fell roughly 10 points from 52.8 to 42.2 in the 25- 35 range, the number
in
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of
women in the same
age
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groups rose just over 1 point from 47.7, which was lower than males, to 48.9, overtaking males of the
second
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group.
Secondly
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, while the
rate
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of
activity
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for males continued to fall to its lowest overall level in the 35-45
age
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group, womenʼs
participation
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grew again to 52.5%, roughly 15% higher than the males of the same
age
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.
Thirdly
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, in the 45-55 group, females reached
peak
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a peak participation
participation
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at 53.3
% while
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%, while
males
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male
activity
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reversed and rose to 43.1, about 10% lower than the women. Fourthly, in the 55-64
age
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range, womenʼs
participation
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has declined slightly to 53
percent while
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percent, while
the male
rate
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has increased 2 points to 45.1%.
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Finally at
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Finally, at
ages
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age
65 plus, male and female rates of physical
activity
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are nearly equal with womenʼs, which fell six points to 47.1, its lowest overall level, though still slightly higher than the
rate
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for men at 46.7;
this
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genderʼs
second
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highest
rate
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of
participation
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overall.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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