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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world.

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Although
 English becoming the solo
language
 with the growth of tourism is thought advantageous by many, other consider it can be detrimental.
One
language
 helps in maintaining cordial relations across globe and helps in
growth
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the growth
 of
business but
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business, but
 there are certain drawbacks to be taken into account. On the
one
 hand, there are
number
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a number
 of advantages of English becoming the single
language
 with the development of tourism.
Firstly
,
one
language
 helps in developing
cordial relationship
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a cordial relationship
 by means of easy communication. Communication is a two way process and is considered healthy when both parties understand and respond to each other well.
Secondly
,
this
 helps students from various parts of the world to study the courses they wanted in any country.
Language
 will not be a barrier anymore in achieving their dreams.
Thirdly
, having
one
language
 can do wonders in
business world
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the business world
also
. Business and traders will no longer be requiring
translaters
a person who translates written messages from one language to another
translators
 for the deal or message they want to convey to their clients or stakeholders.
On the other hand
,
one
 problem with adopting single
language
 world-wide is that the future generation of the countries will not be able to know the rich cultural heritage of their country that possess in the form of
local
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the local language
language
.
This
 will lead to
further decrease
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a further decrease
 in the personal connect that people have when they interact in their dialect. Another issue with
this
 is that some countries may
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their identity as they are renowned for their rich languages. It is
therefore
 called that there is unity in diversity in India. In conclusion, while there are merits of
one
language
 used globally, it can
also
 lead to danger to cultural heritage and identity crises
for
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in
 same countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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