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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree

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Social networking sites are highly used by people across the world, especially by the young generation. The communication of messages through these websites is fast and it’s having a convincing impact on the youth. Many companies are using
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 mode to promote their goods and to fascinate customers.
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, I am a strong advocate of the fact that social media persuade a user shopping for new articles, yet some part of the old generation is reluctant in buying products being publicized online. In
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 essay, I will discuss both viewpoints. Social media sites convince people in many ways.
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 and foremost, the method used is recurring promotions. The multinational companies put their banners on every networking
sites
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, and the online posters are shown again and again whenever we are accessing these platforms.
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 strategies encourage youngsters to try those items once.
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, while browsing through
facebook
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youtube
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YouTube
 videos, we come across many advertising videos after every two to five
minutes which
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minutes, which
 makes
us browse
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us, browse
 through the merchandiser website and check out their catalogues.
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, the main target audience of the sales team is youth and they are very keen to follow new trends and wants to be always updated.
Such
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 approaches are used by various organizations to make an individual buy a certain good.
On the other hand
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, elder persons don't adapt to any new change easily;
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, most of them prefer to buy things from their long-known shopkeeper
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 of buying an online marketed product. To recapitulate, social media marketing sites manipulate folks to a much greater extent in the context of buying goods. In my point of view, everyone should buy a product which is relevant to his requirement rather than being influenced by sites;
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however old
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however, older
however older
 people should
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 use the advertisements to update themselves with the latest technology and competitive prices.
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