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You have recently used a moving company to move your household items to a new place and they have been damaged in transfer. Write a letter to the company’s manager and say – When and where did it take place? – What is your complaint? – Suggest a reasonable solution.

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Dear Sir, My name is Robert Smith, I am writing
this
 letter regarding the
damaged
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 made to my household chores by your company, Moving Limited while shifting my stuff to the new house. As per discussion with your branch
office
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 all the stuff should be moved to a new place on 5th of March from Bayview to North York.
Although
, I had been receiving my items on time at my new location. But when I was unwrapping cartons
then
 I found out there is a massive dent on
my
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 front door of the refrigerator
was
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 bought by me just two months ago.
This
 is not ending here, I was so furious when I saw that my newly gifted Television screen had cracked too. At the time of order
place
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 your branch manager assured me that all my luggage will be safe and not happen any kind of damage. I would like to have a full inquiry about how
this
 damage happened along with I need my
compensate
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 for all those items.The possible reason for
this
 kind of damage
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are
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lack
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 of supervising the cartons when they are packed to ensure
the
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safety.
Carelessness
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The carelessness
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 of the labours that could break while loading or unloading from
tjhe
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the
 truck. I would like to suggest that hope you hire a new quality assurance staff who will take care of
this
. I am sure you'll look into my suggestion will take action on that. Waiting for your prompt response.
Your
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 Sincerely, Robert Smith
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