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The different between other countries is less than before because people can consume the same goods anywhere in the world.

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The difference between other countries is less than before, because people can consume the same goods anywhere in the
world
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. In my opinion,
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 is the positive development because consumers can have an opportunity to
use
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 products from foreign countries to improve
quality
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 of their
life
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 and
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 can drive the
world
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 economy.
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, consumers have an opportunity to
use
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quality
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 product from foreign countries. Improving the
quality
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 of people
life
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 is caused by improving the
quality
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 of product that they
use
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. If people in developing countries can buy high technology equipments from other countries, they have a chance to
use
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 technology for developing people’s
life
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. Thailand can import a lot of equipments of 3G and 4G technology from other countries and
use
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 it to develop communication system for people in the country,
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. The globalization business can drive the
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 economy. When have an international trade, cycle of money will flow around the
world
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 and
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 is the benefit to the government. The government will receive many tax from international trade and
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 it to develop the country. Thailand received a lot of tax from exportation in recent year,
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,
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 make Thailand government can spend
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 money on infrastructure development. In conclusion, when people can buy the same products anywhere in the
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 and countries are more similar, it is a positive development of human community. I am convinced consumers can have an opportunity to
use
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 product from foreign countries to improve
quality
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 of their
life
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 and
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 can drive the
world
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 economy.

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