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Task 2: The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future.

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this
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 day and age, the conditions of
work
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 have a huge change.
Therefore
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, the workers cannot depend on having the same
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 conditions like before.
This
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 is a hot debated topic that many people often discussed.
Firstly
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, take a look at our life today.
Company
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The company
are rising
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is rising
 more and more and increase the demand of workers in the
work
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 environment. The modern life today decide
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an
 important part of the kind of
work
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 that the employees have. The higher role they play, the more
work
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 they have.
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, people nowadays have more and more knowledge and experiences to know what kind of job is
good
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best
 for themselves. When it comes to discussion, the
possile
capable of happening or existing
possible
 causes are a lot. The
first
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 cause is about the place that the employees have to
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in
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with
.. The labour productivity is decided by the place. Example, if we
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 in a nice and friendly
evironment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 of
work
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, we will feel comfortable when we
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 and we can finish the
work
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 on time and perfectly. If we
work
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 in a bad place like the small, hot and have lots of electronic devices and stuffs which can harm to our health, we can get sick and
can not
can not
cannot
 concentrate on working. The
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 cause is about the salary, the more effort they do, the higher
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the salary
 the company
have
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has
 to pay.
The high
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Higher
 wages can attract the workers and drive them
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work
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to work
 in
effective way
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an effective way
effective ways
. People who
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 in the future need to know they are strong in which aspect, clear their mind and they can know which job is suitable. Prepare enough and more knowledge and experiences is necessary. Energy is
a
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an
 important part of
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,
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 enthusiastically and you will receive what you deserve To sum up, the condition of working
can not
can not
cannot
 be the same with the condition of
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 before. The world is changing and the demands of people are
highers
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Highers
heroes
. I personally believe that everyone are worth to
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 in their best conditions

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • gig economy
  • freelance
  • contract work
  • globalization
  • interconnected economy
  • work-life balance
  • market instability
  • economic fluctuations
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