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The consumption of the world’s resources (oil, and water, etc.) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

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It is argued that our contemporary society is facing the accelerating rate of natural
resources
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resource
 consumption.
This
 essay will look at the fundamental causes of
this
 and suggest some possible solutions to
this
 problem. There are a number of reasons why human
are
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is
overexploiting
 natural resources.
Firstly
, as the world has been highly competitive, all countries, especially developed countries, have sacrificed available
energy
 to stimulate economic prosperity. China,
for instance
,
has excessively consumed
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excessively consumed
excessively consumes
 natural resources
such
 as wood, oil and water in order to become the world's most thriving economy, regardless of the catastrophic effects that they exert on the ecosystem.
Secondly
, more population means more basic human needs, spurring the exploitation of natural resources.
For example
, in the US, the demand for commute by private vehicles in the past 20 years has increased by 50%, leading to an
overexploitation
 of fossil fuels. There are several actions that could be taken to mitigate the problem mentioned above. One possible measure is that international officials should organize high-level conferences to adopt economic growth policies that are less dependent on natural resources. By doing
this
, It is possible for the government to switch to renewable
energy
 sources
such
 as solar and wind
energy
. Another feasible approach is the authorities should enact laws to diminish the over-reliance on equipment with high
energy
 consumption. To illustrate, commuting by motorcycles will be prohibited in Danang city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 in 2030 because the government wants citizens to use fuel-efficient means of transport
such
 as trains and buses. In conclusion, there are various factors leading to an increase in the consumption of natural
energy
 and measures can be implemented to tackle
this
 issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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