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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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From the dawn of the time, most people allotted greatly of their time working. Throughout the history, a lot of researchers tried to come up with a definition and ways to achieve
job
satisfaction
. Being satisfied with
one
's
job
 is an integral part for you to have a happy life and great physical and emotional well-being.
This
 will be proven on how
job
satisfaction
 differs from
one
 individual and another. It is greatly affected by
one
's definition of
satisfaction
 and their expectation
on
Suggestion
of
 the
job
.
To begin
 with, nowadays people's lives greatly depend on their income and benefits from their
job
. Salary seems to be an essential element in considering their happiness and contentment to
one
's
job
. Another contributing element is the working environment. A healthy working environment consists of a good relationship between the employee and the employer, as well as their colleague,
this
 has been an important role in attaining
job
satisfaction
.
In addition
, without any doubt having a good time at
work
 is
one
 to take into consideration. To be more specific no
one
 can be satisfied with their
job
 if they are having an unhealthy relationship with their colleagues,
this
 will definitely give them a lot of stress and will soon affect the person's
job
 performance.
Last
 but not the least, career growth opportunity is
also
one
 of the elements to be considered to attain a
great
Suggestion
greater
job
satisfaction
 that triggers the employee's happiness and making them realise their
potentials
Suggestion
potential
. Apparently, there are so many contributing elements to attain
job
satisfaction
. But it is really possible for
one
 to be satisfied with their
job
? In my own point of view, I would definitely agree that
one
 can be satisfied
on
Suggestion
with
 their
job
 depending on their definition of
satisfaction
 and depending on their reasonable and attainable expectation on their
work
. In my case, if I have to
dependent
Suggestion
depend
 on my salary and benefits for my
job
satisfaction
 it will be certain that I'm unsatisfied with my current
job
. As no
one
 will be satisfied with their
job
 if that will be their basis, because a good financial compensation and an excellent benefit
is
Suggestion
are
have been
are being
 just a prize for all your hard
work
.
Furthermore
, working long hours and having a
low
Suggestion
lower
 salary will be out of the picture if you will just learn how to love your
work
 and enjoy what you are doing. To sum it up,
although
 it is hard to be fully satisfied
on
Suggestion
with
one
's
job
, it would be great if you will focus on the positive aspect of your
work
 ad ignore the negative side of it, in order for you to achieve
job
satisfaction
 and happiness in life.
Submitted by Nithya on

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