Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. Why? How can we solve this problem?

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In today's society, more and more children are not focusing on school work. There are many different reasons for

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, and parents and teachers can take proactive steps to completely reduce

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problem.

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of all, parents need to pay attention to the diet, sleep time in a day and the use of children's technology devices. Many children are often fed too much high sugar foods by their parents,

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as candy or fast food, while very little fresh food

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as green vegetables, eggs or milk to supplement iron. Iron deficiency causes physical fatigue, reduces attention, distracts concentration and causes memory problems.

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, children need 10 to 11 hours of sleep a day. If children do not get enough sleep, they will feel very tired, they will

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show signs of reduced attention in learning.

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, some parents often let their children use smart technology devices

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as iPads, smartphones. Scientific studies show that blue light emitted from televisions, computers, tablets or phones can disrupt the circadian rhythm, radiation from those devices will reduce the ability to develop the brain. Children's

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a bank check that has been fraudulently altered to increase its face value

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, making children receive passive and easily distracted information.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

191 words

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Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. Why? How can we solve this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

Some people prefer to carefully plan activities in their free time others think it’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your answer?

Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i.e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages?

There are growing demands for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions?