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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Cow
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The cow
 is
very useful animal
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a very useful animal
 and gives us milk. Milk is considered as the complete and nutritious
food
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. Cow is a domestic and religious animal. In India, it is ritual and custom to worship Cow. Cow’s milk is used in the
pooja
one side of one leaf (of a book or magazine or newspaper or letter etc.) or the written or pictorial matter it contains
page
,
abhisek
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 and other holy purposes.
Cow
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The cow
 is called by everyone as “Gau Mata” to give her mother like status in the Hindu religion. It has a large body, four legs,
one
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 long tail, two horns, two
ear
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ears
, two eyes,
one
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 big nose,
one
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 big mouth and
one
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 head. It is found in almost every
regions
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region
 of the country. It is found in different shapes and sizes. Cow found in our country become
small
Accept comma addition
small, however
however
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 big cows are found in other countries. We should take good care of the cow and give her
goods quality
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a good quality
good quality
 of
food
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 and clean water. She eats green grasses,
food
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, grains, hay and other things.
First
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 she chews the
food
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 well and slowly and swallows to her stomach. Her back is long and wide.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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