in the past, the older generation were a source f knowledge and experience. Nowadays, the older generation have little understanding or experience of modern world. Has this had any negative impact on the way the elderly are treated by society and the family? What could be done to solve this situation?

Previously, in times of lack of information about the world, in times of non-existence of TV and media, grandparents were people’s social networks. Nowadays, while the world has changed radically, the attitude towards them has
also
respectively changed. In my essay I will describe why it affects negatively and what solution can help to minimize their depression of
this
cause. Obviously, with the advent of the Internet, our generation began to communicate less in real life, especially to devote time to the elder people. The point is not the loneliness of people in real life because of modern virtual world, which is a global problem too, but altered attitude towards the grandparents due to the lack of need for their non-generalized information about a particular issue or historical event, excluding
family history
Suggestion
the family history
or specific fact, which over time
also
lose interest in
new generation
Suggestion
the new generation
a new generation
. Any kind of information can be found just by
simple
Suggestion
simply
click the button, while earlier people with questions were going to old age population which are full of knowledge and experience. That made generations closer, and of course grandparents were feeling happy due to being useful. In my opinion,
generation gap
Suggestion
the generation gap
that we have now could be
fill
Suggestion
filled
by simple solution. Since almost everyone use social media we can use it in
beneficial way
Suggestion
a beneficial way
the beneficial way
beneficial ways
for
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people as well. In order to remind people of progenitors, how important to devote time and attention to them, I propose to solve the issue by publishing promo videos about the times when everyone appealed to the elders, learned recipes of family dishes and beauty tips. I hope, by illustrating in advertisements how pleasant to sit with a hot drink with your grandmother in the kitchen to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
the story of their youth, people could return their attitude. To sum up, times have changed
similar
Suggestion
similarly
as people and their relationships to each other, but
this
is not a reason to change for the worse and forget about our relatives, especially if they are older.
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