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School aged students should be taught how to manage money. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over a long period of time, people often debate whether it’s appropriate for adolescents to master the skills of money management. While a school of thought
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, others believe it is not unnecessary venturing into
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 life at a young age. In my opinion, I strongly agree, and
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 analyse how young people can be financially dependent and
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 help encourage
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 plans. To start with, monetary
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 skills at a very young age enables a huge financial dependence,
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 is so because, young people are normally attracted to frivolous
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things, but
 once the habit of saving has been implemented on their at
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an
 early stage, it becomes easy to navigate things financially.
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, a friend of mine who lived with his grandmother while growing up had the opportunity to be tutored early
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on, saving
 funds in a piggy bank which he would
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 use to purchase any desired item.
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, teaching students on funds management improves their
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 adaptation skills;
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 is because, they have gathered enough knowledge as to how to tackle difficulties and
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, infuse these skills into their
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 transactions.
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Persons
 enrolling in a
business
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 school while growing up and one of the courses taught was money
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 has helped me to grow my textile
business
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 greatly.
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Encouraging
 young people to engage in. To sum up, funds mgt skill is essential to achieve financial dependence & success in
business
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 transactions thereby preparing the youths for the future
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