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Some people think that when recruiting companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #companies #aim #work #team #instructions
According to
one
 group of people, companies hiring workers should give priority to those who
work
 themselves and
innovatively
, when others are confident that employees should be capable to
work
 in a team and obey the rules. I
am belonging
Suggestion
belong
 to the
second
 group and believe in the integrity of the team. On the
one
 hand, employees who
work
 on their own can bring their creativity, personal ideas that can be innovative and original.
Also
, for
such
 employees there is no need to wait for the rest,
for example
, a report, schedule or presentation.
This
 can lead to increased productivity, as well as improve the
company
's reputation.
Consequently
, innovative employees who can
work
 unattended are an asset to any organization.
On the other hand
, I completely agree with people who sure that the staff should be suitable to
work
 together as
one
 and follow the instructions.
Thru
Suggestion
Three
 of these skills, the complete
company
 will achieve success faster than each employee individually. Through teamwork, employees can cover weaknesses and lack of experience of each other. Problem solution can be found more efficiently or
work
 out a new project by conducting a brainstorm all together, where everyone can offer their ideas or
work
 out
one
 inspired by someone, give better result. Obviously, submission to instructions
also
 leads to discipline. Neither
company
 where chaos exists has succeeded. So the employee must follow the standards.
This
 type of
worker
Suggestion
work
 can bring each
company
 wanted satisfaction. In conclusion, the recruiting employer needs staff that gives the result. I think a team of individuals is more effective in success than
ones
Suggestion
one
one's
 parts
separately
Suggestion
separate
separated
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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