Do you agree that obesity is increasing in some rich countries?

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With the
prevelance
the quality of prevailing generally; being widespread
prevalence
of urbanization and modernism,
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obesity rate
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the obesity rate
has been constantly rising around the world. The problem is becoming
inreasingly
advancing in amount or intensity
increasingly
important as a number of studies have
demosntrated
having been demonstrated or verified beyond doubt
demonstrated
that the
overwight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
peope
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
are more vulnerable to diseases. While many people blame genetics and
methabolism
the marked and rapid transformation of a larva into an adult that occurs in some animals
metabolism
for
obesity
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, it mostly stems from an unhealthy
diet
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and
sedentry
requiring sitting or little activity
sedentary
lifestyle. In
this
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article we
disscuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discusses
discussed
two elegant solutions to tackle
obesity
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.
Addmitedly
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Admittedly
, having a healthy
diet
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is essential for
overal
involving only main features
overall
well-being. Our body
require
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requires
a large
veriety
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
of
minreals
solid homogeneous inorganic substances occurring in nature having a definite chemical composition
minerals
and vitamins for growth,
maintanece
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
, and optimal function. According to a study by the University of Cambridge, the heavier a person is the higher their calorie intake.
In particular
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, people with a
wight
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
of equal or greater than 80 KG consume 40% more
caleries
unit of heat defined as the quantity of heat required to raise the temperature of 1 gram of water by 1 degree centigrade at atmospheric pressure
calories
per day than others. Nowadays, more people are being forced to order their meals online due to their busy
scedules
plan for an activity or event
schedules
schedule
and working
requirments
required activity
requirements
which has resulted in a a record-breaking fast-food
consumtion
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
. It
truns
change orientation or direction, also in the abstract sense
turns
out that if people had consumed less
calerioes
unit of heat defined as the quantity of heat required to raise the temperature of 1 gram of water by 1 degree centigrade at atmospheric pressure
calories
, they wouldn’t have suffered from
obesity
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.
Therfore
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Therefore
, developing a healthier
diet
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by cooking at home and restraining the
consumtion
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
of low-quality foods would result in less
obesity
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in the society.
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, regardless of how well balanced the nutritional
diet
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is, performing regular
expercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
is necessary to keep the risks low for some of the most common health issues. The World Health Organization reported that the extent to which physical activity is practiced in a society is
inversly
in an inverse or contrary manner
inversely
proportional to the
obesity
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rate.
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, regular physical
acyivity
any specific behavior
activity
not only decreases the risk of
disease but
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disease, but
also
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creates a sense
og
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
happinies
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
and achievement.
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, many people
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
obesity
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is somewhat
invetable
incapable of being avoided or prevented
inevitable
and you have no control over, it is something that could be avoided if every precaution is taken. Overall, maintaining a healthy and rich nutritional
diet
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as well as following an active lifestyle significantly help preventing
obesity
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.

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