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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Mothers will try their best to provide the best
environment
 for their children. Some people believe that it is important for young children to go to
school
 as soon as possible, other children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they reach six or seven years old. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the advantages of children attending
school
 at a young age. Nursery schools
is
Suggestion
are
 a place dedicated
for
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to
children
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child
children's
 development. It is designed for the children starting from two to three years old, to help them
on
Suggestion
in
with
 their physical, mental and emotional development. There are facilities and toys to help children to learn basic skills, there are
also
 teachers that are trained
for
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in
 helping children grow in the nursery schools.
Also
, as there are other children in nursery schools, children can learn to interact with others, which homeschooling can not provide.
This
 is the
first
 advantages of attending
school
 from
a
Suggestion
an
 age of three. The
second
 advantages of attending
school
 is it
also
 provides a better
environment
 for the family. Taking care of a child is a tiring twenty-four-seven job. Mother and father are the only one responsible for the child grow. By putting the child
into
Suggestion
in
school
, mother and father can have more freedom and leisure time. They can take the time to learn from others to become a better parent. They can
also
 put more time and energy to family to create a better
environment
. In conclusion, I believe children attending
school
 at age of two is better than homeschooling children until they are six or seven. As it provides a better
environment
 for
children
Suggestion
child
children's
 development, and
also
 provides a better
environment
 for family taking care of the children.

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