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All education, primary, secondary and further education, should be free to all people and paid for by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education
 plays an indispensable role in building a successful of a person. Authorities should pay all
education
 student fees and should be free to all the individuals. In my perspective, the government would be only paid fees for needy people not for rich individuals. It is obvious that
education
 is the most powerful weapon which we can change the whole world. The main point is that as the government of every
nation provide
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nation to provide
 free higher
education
 for poor people in their country,
then
 it would be very beneficial for them because they can easily enhance their knowledge of distinctive subjects which pupils can get
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to do
more better
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more good
 in their career.
For instance
, a recent Cambridge study revealed that if the scholars who get decent grades in their field,
then
this
 may help to free the whole expenses of their
education
 fees a provide more scholarships and the opportunities to them which they can easily live a better lifestyle. Apart from
this
, since the authorities pay fees for poverty-stricken people,
then
 school and university could
also
 offer several subjects and the events for students which they can start to increase their insight. As a consequence, the development of every nation would escalate around the globe.
For example
, even if law enforcement agencies pay educational fees for needy people, it would not only be superior
for
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to
 poor ones, but
this
 may help a country to increase its name and fame all around the world,
therefore
, the majority of people can easily pay their other expenses
instead
 of educational fees and the gap between the rich and poor people would be equal in
future
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the future
. To sum up,
although
 it is a decent way to pay the whole fees by the authorities, poor people can get a chance to
do
engage in
make
 higher
education
 in their life, yet they should not pay educational fees for the wealthy individuals owing to which, they already have much money to pay their own
education
 fees.
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